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:iconsheesh1991-sguwriter:
First chapter of my continuation of SGU, my fanfiction of SGU. This is basically a season 3 that I imagined up. Finished this chapter up while in Guatamala last week. Sorry about the intro guys, I'm not very good with that kind of stuff. Anyways, make sure you download it. It's way too long to post the text into the description. It's just...a lot...18 pages, to be exact. So, download, read it, and give me some feedback, tell me what you think. I will be reading your comments, so I know what people like about it and what they don't like about it, so that I may correct the wrongs for future chapters. Oh, and Chapter 2 is in the works right now, so don't worry. I'll try and have it done within a week or so. So, yeah. Read it, and give meh opinions!!! Oh yeah, and the preview image is temporary for now. Just until I find a suitable preview image large enough, and that fits the theme for my fan fiction.
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:iconsunsfire:
for feedback do you just want artistic critiques or are you talking like editing as well?
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:iconsheesh1991-sguwriter:
Critique, anything you liked or disliked about the story and the storyline. Be warned, chapter two is going to have a MAJOR head-turner event happen.
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:iconsunsfire:
Thank You!!!!!! :boogie:

I just found all of the save Sci-Fi and the lost shows pages this week, while I was looking around I found your post on Christopher Judge's page with a link to this story from back in July. Excellent work! I do agree that the stronger than normal language surprised me, not that I mind, it just surprised me, a little out of character for the show, but I'm ok with it. How will we know when chapter 2 comes out? Will you post on savestargateuniverse page when a new chapter comes out? I am also a member, but only since 8-15-11.
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:iconsheesh1991-sguwriter:
Chapter 2 is only 2 pages away from being done. I'mma gonna upload it today once I finish it.
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~enslavedbydragons Aug 13, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
C'mon people! I need feedback!
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:iconwaldo420:
Pretty good. I like it. A couple of small things, Rush wouldnt have said "'our' decedents" cause he wasnt one of the ones who went through, he would've said 'your' or 'your others' something like that. I think also, while on the subject of Rush, that he was already on the road to belive that Destiny had its own consciousnesses, I.E. convo's with franklin and his late wife on Destiny's bridge. He knew then that images were not Franklin or his wife, but were being used by Destiny as visual representations for Rush to interact with. And while I agree that there would be more cursing if this to actually take place in our reality, this takes place in the stargate reality and we've watched and listened to them for nearly 2 decades so it feels contrived to hear them cursing. for the record Im not saying that about the cursing cause Im a dip-shit assmuncher who thinks that cursing is some huge horrible fuckin thing. I curse just as much if not more then the next shitbag. Im just adding my 2 cents. But the core story itself, I feel is strong. The way you unfold the plot feels alot like how they would have done it on the show. Many of the Character interactions are spot on. Im interested to read the rest. hope your still working on it, cause Im still waiting for it. ;) I hope to see Jonas make an unexpected return from the dead,(possibly with some bit of knowledge pertaining to what the L.A. is up to this time), and I think if your looking for a way to dial Destiny, that when Mckay wanted to dial Destiny from that one planet, they said they wanted their scientists to go over Mckay's theory first. Mckay was against it because he said it would take months for them to understand it. Well...maybe it actually took them 3 years and they are now ready to dial Destiny for us. Which would be a viable way to bring Mckay into the story as well. So, my review is, very good! I enjoyed it. It really does feel like SGU. Good JOB!! My name is Aaron Waldo, you can find me on FB and Im a member of the savestargateuniverse page. please make sure that I have to opportunity to know when you finish the 2nd chapter. Im into it. Keep up the good work.
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:iconsheesh1991-sguwriter:
Thanks for the insight Aaron! It was something that I really needed, lol. And yeah, I'm actually working on chapter two as I type this. I just finished a...holy crap, and almost 4 page development story for the Descendants and a new species. I've got some really big twists and some really big head turners planned for this chapter. :) Something that I think any Stargate fan would love to see, some "HOLY SHIT!!! NO FUCKIN' WAY!!!" moments of the series, lol.
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